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Over the last several years I have started a number of semi-serious sceince fiction and fantasy writing projects. Since then I have been seeking feedback and constructive criticism as all writers want. This is not easy to come by.

There are some writing groups in my area but they are either full to capacity and not accepting any new members, or too far away to be able to attend enough meetings to be able to adaquately participate. There are also some online crituque groups (see my Links page) but of those tend to have automated critque accounting systems that I just can not keep up with at this chaotic time of my life.

Thus I am hoping to find a few SF/F fans that would be interested in reading some of my work and providing me with comments as to where the story makes sense and where it does not. I have a good friend that will provide me with spelling, grammar, and other similar mechanical proofing. But she does not want to influence my decisions in the story telling. So what I am looking for most is if readers can tell what is happening in the story from the words. Also I could use some "does this seem feasable for someone to do this" kind of feedback.

Below I will provide a descritpion and several paragraphs from each of my projects that is currently active. If you see a story you would like to help me with then please email me. (Of course, tell me which story title it was.)

Geodian-Warz
Victorian era humans on another world battle aliens in a H.G. Wells War of the Worlds type situation with some help from modern Earth technology through a mysterious gate that appears at the South Pole.

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Kevin turned back to the opening expecting to see the Humvee idling there. Not only was there no vehicle, but the whole scene through the opening was different. There was still snow and ice everywhere, but the lighting was the purple and orange of a colorful sunset. There was a steady gentle breeze blowing through the opening. It felt slightly less cold than what he had felt before.

Kevin curiously walked back through the opening. Where the vehicle had been before was now empty snow. Where the sun had been shining brightly above the horizon in a brilliant blue sky, there was now deep blue instead. Kevin scanned the horizon and saw the orange sun peeking above the horizon off to his left. He took a deep breath. The air felt noticeably heavier. This was not the same place he had been just a few steps ago. The sun he saw along the horizon looked more orange and perhaps larger than it should. He wasn't sure if the optical illusion of horizon effect could account for all of the apparent change in size.
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God Stone
A young archeology assistant discovers that her mysterious ring of knowledge puts her in danger and on the run as other forces seek its power.

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Kim started to worry that it was a mistake to wear the ring out in the open. She had little choice if she wanted to keep it with her and she had not been apart from it in the two years since she discovered it. The graduate students were not clothing savvy enough to provide her with a purse to match her fashionable garment. The gown had no pockets and the low neckline did not allow her to wear the ring on a necklace as she so often did. So she decided to put the ring on as a ring.
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Gray Star Rising
Humans discover a new propulsion technology that makes the solar system as accessible as sailing between the continents was a century ago. But this same new technology has the potential for the next step as well, travel between the stars.

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"Ten minutes to ignition," the newscaster's voice announced. Ignition was hardly the right word for it, Andrew thought to himself. Unlike all previous space mission launches there would be absolutely nothing visible. No spectacular flame, no rocket blast of exhaust, not even the special effects glow of spaceships in the movies. The GrayStar would simply start gently moving out of Earth orbit at the sluggish acceleration of one tenth of a gee, a mere one meter per second increase in velocity each second. But, old expectations die hard, he consoled himself; people were used to the past decades of fiery rocket launches and this was the first use of a radically new form of propulsion.
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In addition to the above "active" projects, I have several more that might get dusted off and put here for consideration.